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Originally Posted by SLC Projects
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Both looked fine to me.
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I love your video and I just want it to look more professional. Below are the transcripts of the title cards with errors. The bold indicates the corrections I have made. Some are actual mistakes, while others are simply style suggestions. Do with my suggestions as you choose.
The last office high
-rise that was buil[b]t[b] in downtown
Salt
Lake was back in 1998...
The last
hotel high
-rise was the Grand America
[no "n"] Hotel that open
ed in 2001...
Salt Lake City hasn't seen a new high
-rise for over six years...
Let the
construction begin
[no "e"]!!!
In December of 2006
, The Inn at Temple Square came down...
Then in February
[? it's not Feb. yet and they've already started taking the parking garage down], the Crossroads Mall started to come down
to make way for the City Creek Project
. On 100
South
, a 32-story condo tower will be built.
There
has been talk that a Tower 3 . . .
Other projects include
[no "s"]:
222
South Main Office Tower
21
[no "-"] Stories
We are just waiting for those pussies at Hami
lton Partners to break
[space]ground.
The Metro Condos
7
[no "-"] Stories
University Hospit
al Expansion
6
[no "-"] stories on both wings
But Salt Lake City isn't the only city
scheduled to get some new high
-rises...
January 31, 2007
, Frank Gehry unveil
ed a master plan that will give Lehi a new tallest building in Utah.
45-story five
-star hotel
and Pleasant Grove will be getting two high
-rise hotels
:
14-story "Embassy
Suites Hotel"
"Gehry's 45-story Hotel in Lehi" and "Embassy
Suites Hotel and Marriott Hotel in Pleasant
[space] Grove
As we start to add over 7 new high
-rise
s to the area.
This final sentence isn't a complete sentence. It appears that it should be a second clause of the sentence preceding it, but if that's the case, the first one shouldn't end in a period.]
I hope you don't take offense at my pointing out the errors. I just want your excellent work to look a little more polished.